Character+Sketch

Character Sketch-A Mountain Journey, by Howard O'Hagan

In the case of Dave Conroy, there is a balance of good and bad traits of character, for example, determined, stubborn, and foolish. Character traits are an integral part of the development of a story, for example, they influence a characters choices, move the plot of the story along, and can lead to the success or failure of the storyline. Some of them would be better suited to a life in the city, instead o one in the mountains trapping animals for their pelts. As the story progresses, you will find that one of his main traits is determination; a trait that could lead to a very successful life in the city, but could lead to your death in the mountains, as Dave demonstrated, to his misfortune. He also shows that he is stubborn by passing up many opportunities that could have saved his life, including not sleeping at the tree that he described as a "...tree like a strong and lonely woman." because it would have changed the course he took over the river. He also skipped his opportunity to warm up him hands and feet after he fell in the river, which would have allowed him to start a fire at the burnt out cabin, removing the need to trek up the mountain to MacMoran's cabin. As the reader, **__you__** will find he shows foolishness, relating to the situations given above, if he had not been so foolish as to convince himself that his feet and hands where only cold, but not wet, he would have been able to start a fire, or passing the tree, thinking that he would have no problems reaching the cabin. In conclusion, Dave Conroy showed that his stubborn and foolish traits outweighed his determination, costing him his life in the end.

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